Military Writing  - Award Examples

The following Example has been taken out of a FORMFLOW so the formatting might be off.  I did not changed mission information, only names to protect myself and the people I have received the information from.

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Laser Jet 4M
Pg Stats: .6 LT .6 RT .5 T .5 B

OUTSTANDING LEADERSHIP
- Boldly led 15 airmen/14 civilian contractors sustaining the high Op Tempo U-2/Distributed Ground
  Station-? (DGS-?) weapon system...delivered actionable intel to fellow warfighters across the globe 
- Superb as additional Duty First Sergeant slot for 265-person squadron...squadron never missed a beat
  -- Balanced people/msn like the best diamond wearer...unequaled mentor; kept discipline issues at bay
- Brilliantly honed critical functions via robust workcenter training program--repeatedly superior results
  -- Rated "Excellent" during stringent Managerial Inspection; zero deficiencies noted on {WING} SAV 
- Leaned forward in preparation for the unit's first-ever ORI; committed half of his shop to hold key
  unit and wing readiness positions; programs shined...{WING}/unit earned "Excellent" ratings 
- Prominent planner; tackled logistics requirements to inaugurate first beyond line-of-sight (BLOS) U-2
  ops in PACOM...flawlessly executed 12 missions overland Korea missions...100% msn reliability rate
  -- CINPAC and COMPACAF messages heaped praise...theater eagerly anticipating next deployment 
- Boosted morale and welfare through emphasis on both mission objectives and quality of life programs
  -- Provided clear guidance and led troops through development of strategic plan to include vision and
     mission statement and specific goals--strengthened awareness and appreciation for complex mission
- {GROUP} 2001 Leo Marquez Outstanding Aircraft Maintenance (Supervisor-Manager) award nominee

EXEMPLARY CONTRIBUTIONS TO WARFIGHTING CAPABILITIES
- Built BLOS U-2 maintenance teams to work real-world missions in PACOM/EUCOM/SOUTHCOM
  -- Experience enabled DGS-? to expedite response to JCS taskings following the 9/11 terrorist attacks
  -- Put logistics tail out front--wagging the dog! Jumped system upgrade hurdles...built sustainable
     schedule/teams to work 24/7 Operation ENDURING FREEDOM (OEF) U-2 and Global Hawk ops 
- Led tiger team to move data from JWICS circuit to DCGS wide area network; bypassed slower base
  comms pathways to swiftly move OEF U-2 targeting data to SWA...cut minutes of kill chain process 
  -- Laid foundation to receive and disseminate NRT Global Hawk unmanned aerial vehicle (UAV) data
- During Operation JOINT GUARDIAN in the Balkans, provided comprehensive imagery processing
  system oversight; maintained 99% msn ready rate for U-2 radar and electro-optical imagery systems
- Facilitated contractor maintenance to complete $24M+ in system modifications...deftly managed 
  compressed integration schedule...key to ensuring U-2 was first manned ISR asset over Afghanistan
  -- Vastly improved unit's target mensuration ability...denied the enemy sanctuary; increased accuracy 
     of imagery helped to averted collateral damage against civilians...reduced unintentional loss of life

OUTSTANDING PERFORMANCE IN ACCOMPLISHING A DEMANDING TASK OR PROGRAM
- Launched first system administrator work center to fuse Predator UAV and national assets; supplied
  manning, leadership, and administration work space to deliver an enhanced view of the battlespace
- Lived outside the box--promoted cross-feed of manpower to solve unit's most pressing problems 
  -- Provided airmen to under-manned Comm and Info Flight to meet additional labor-intensive security
     requirements--ground station received/maintained approval to operate--kept DGS-? in the fight
- Catalyst of synergy; teamed with Northrop Grummon contractor to install Tactical Support Equipment
  -- Guided in next step in evolution of U-2 reachback architecture...BLOS ops...a top AF ISR priority
  -- Retrofitted equipment/legacy hardware so workstation could be configured to operate on common
      operations floor; provided ability to conduct simultaneous imagery missions--a ground station first
- Delivered on Mission Operations Commander requirement for enhanced ops intercom capability 
  -- Satisfied requirement in 12 days...bypassed redundant items in approval process already baselined
  -- Saved $50K by using in-house assets, labor and associated hardware versus depot funded materials 
  -- Streamlined ops/improved efficiency; enhanced internal and external comms with crew, pilot, users
- Developed imagery monitor preventive care procedures; increased kills/reduced collateral damage
  -- Enhanced resolution clarified targets/reduced ambiguity--key component in precision engagement 
- "In a pinch" go-to leader...no task too large for him or his shop.. consistently exceeded expectations 



General Notes:

In this package innovation is a huge factor. It was portrayed in cost savings, speed and money.  Overall this package is strong.  It fields the persons expertise well, and shows why they deserve the award.  I like the reference to the Leo Marquez win.  Very nice touch. After 9/11, time was a huge buzz word in the military. Knowing the buzz of the moment can lead to very strong packages. Like all Air Force writing, know your audience. 

The only writing problems I see in it is the transition from ellipses (...) to double dashes (--).  Depending on the unit, and the reviewers it is normally not allowed.  Pick on style and stay with it.  Also, be careful of getting Acronym crazy....  This package pushes it to the limit .  of expectable. depends on your location and mission. What was portrayed in this was cost savings in Time.