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Award Examples

Enlisted Recognition Program (SNCO of the Quarter, 1st)
(Air Force Reserve)

Award Cat: SNCO
Winner: ?






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The following example has been taken out of a IMT  document.  I have changed mission information to protect myself and the people I have received the information from.  I will attempt to give a little insight to the entire process if I know it.

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LEADERSHIP AND JOB PERFORMANCE IN PRIMARY DUTY: 
- True Leader! Dedicated/inspirational; highly energetic/enthusiastic; sets goals/achieves results; experienced!
- Recognizing Top Performers/Introducing Management! Conceptualized/developed professional display boards
  -- Designed/created two 4'x3' distinguished oak display cases to publicize/honor {###} CF Mngt/Award Winners
  -- Unselfishly donated 6 days of personal time/$214.00 for supplies (red oak wood/stain/letters/picture frames) 
- Promoting unit moral/individual self-esteem! Researched/developed/submitted 10 annual awards; a FIRST!
  -- 1st Term AMN (AFSA); AMN/NCO/SNCO/Team/Unit Comm & Info Awards (AFRC); OAY Award (AF)
  -- Unit won AFRC's highly prestigious "Communication/Information General Edwin Rawlings Team Award"
- Expediting notification! Spearheaded re-design of phone recall procedures; much easier to reference/maintain
  -- Merged phone recall roster with org chart; using chain of command; promoting team work/accountability
  -- Re-engineered 2"x3" wallet size recall phone roster/cards to replicate org chart; quick access/easy to use
- Honored 20 yrs of dedicated service; planned/implemented unit's best informal (BDU) retirement ceremony
  -- Obtained/organized presentation of Commendation Medal/retirement certificate/flag box/PC disk shadow box
  -- Assigned/delegated/empowered individuals to solicit money/procure food & drinks/setup & arrange facilities
- Planning ahead! Preparing unit's 1st dress blues retirement ceremony; recognizing mbr's 21 yrs of contributions
  -- Engineered 16" disk platter oak plaque; team engraved personalized messages; capturing the moment forever
- Pro-active leadership! Developed/distributed EPR/PFW spreadsheet; communicating future suspense dates
- Actively recruiting; coordinated/communicated with Raleigh recruiters to interview/fill key 3C0 positions
- Influencing others! Orchestrated 2 commander's calls; composed/presented annual review/future goals/projects
- Preparing for Annual Tour; engineered professional laminated {###}CF personalized bag tags for all members 
- Maximizing space! Directed moving/re-organizing the {###}CF building to optimize organizational structure
- Seizing opportunities! Requisitioned 12 tables/chairs from wing training dept; to create unit training room
- Optimizing resources; cleaned/re-organized {###}CF file directory; returned 38%; saving 10G of usable storage

SIGNIFICANT SELF-IMPROVEMENT:
- Combat ready! Takes advantage of training opportunities; excels in expanding career/professional knowledge
  -- Attended demanding/grueling 5 day Information Technology Infrastructure Library (ITIL) certification course
  -- Visionary leadership! Spends hours researching/developing new/more efficient ways to accomplish mission
- Skilled instructor; designed/developed/presented 5 day REXX & ISPF programming class; sharing knowledge

OK, the 2nd step in writing, Know thy audience.  What is REXX and ISPF.  If the common reader doesn't know it,  Go generic!


- Professional development; enhanced "NCOs Toolkit" CDs; added 54 new award/EPR guides/sample forms
- Promoting/endorsing physical fitness; enthusiastically participates in Physical Training on UTA/personal time

BASE OR COMMUNITY INVOLVEMENT:
- True Citizen! Unselfishly contributed time/talent/money to Charlotte Rescue Mission; committed to helping
  -- Cleaned/organized large warehouse; removed/transported bed sheets/other items to Crisis Assistance Center
  -- Purchased/delivered desperately needed supplies (antacids, cold medicines, cough drops, men's underwear)
- Educating others! Donated over 250+ Award/EPR documents/video clips to post on www.fromtheinside.us
- Active mentoring; provided guidance/ideas to recognize local business for supporting Christmas Party (Jan)
- Supports/promotes military organizations; joined professional AFSA/NCO Club; helping AF members/families

 

NOTE:

  Air Force Reserve and Guard writing styles differ considerably to Active Duty, mainly do to AD constant changing political environment (IMHO).  I like this.  The writer has improved their writing style since the 04 award examples.  It flows very smoothly.  There are some acronyms that are AFR/AFG common.  Besides that, it has good cause and effect/action-impact writing.  The only problems I seen were a couple of numbering problems and the last line of significant self-improvement.  It reads like filler...  Another tid-bit of info, drop trailing decimal of all numbers.  round to the nearest whole number. (eg.  219.56 should read 220) Overall a good package.

 


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